Matt Bellamy

This was all tell and no show, and loses all structure halfway through - the last five lines seem more like prose than an actual poem. Find an original way ...

It is a good start, but I need to know more - as it stands, this poem gives me nothing to relate to. Who are you talking to, why do ...

I like the repetition of inhaling and exhaling, and how at the end you seem to have gone to...well, what I would call your happy place. Also, "chastise my mind ...

What I like about this is that I tried to interpret it into something else, and there was more than one thing that I thought it could mean. Your description ...

Firstly, I'd like to welcome you to the site. Secondly, I'd like to let you know that we have a 2:1 ratio rule here - so that you critique two ...

Need it be said again? This is excellent. You describe everything so beautifully, your use of imagery is great - watercolour sunset, tasting colours on your fingertips...Also, I like the ...

I really like the first stanza, especially how you put links on a separate line. The last line of that stanza is great, too. I think you use good rhyming ...

I think the letter kind of format was a good idea, however aside from that, your poem seems to have no structure at all, and I know poems don't have ...

Let's jump straight in. The first two lines don't rhyme, and neither do the last two, so they're not in keeping with the rest of the poem. I like the ...

I thought I had already critiqued this...hmm. Anyway, the concept is good, and relatable, but not very well-written. The repetition of I hate...was too much. And yellow was very random. ...

This was rather nice but to be honest, I skipped the second half because it was so long, and seemed to drag out. I think you could say all you ...

Yes, the rhyming scheme is good, and yes, the writing itself is not bad. However, I find the rhyming scheme a little too light-hearted for this subject. The tone just...doesn't ...

Someone once said, if a poem only has three good lines, it should only be three lines long. I think the repeated End my... is filler. It adds nothing to ...

This was okay. I'm not sure what you mean by "no breaks" though - it sounds a little like you wrote this just for the sake of rhyming, which rarely ...

Morgan! :) Haven't seen you around for a while. Beautifully written. I love your voice, if you know what I mean? The way you capture the scene...it's just great. Also, ...